11/3

We will be taking a mock departmental exam (ATTENDANCE IS MANDATORY)

Assignment over the weekend:

Bring second draft of Writing Experience Essay:

• Revise your essay
• Use feedback provided

Essay Notes

·         Avoid clutter à Make your point à Trim à Eliminate unnecessary words or passages à Things we already know

·         Never start sentence with “And” , “But”, “Which”, “As”

·         Rephrase: Run On/Fragment/Sentence is Too Long / Confusing

·       W.C = Word Choice

·         V then word = Insert

·         Capitalize I à proper noun

·         Time Based Organizing Patterns (TBOP)   benefit

First

Second

One experience

Another experience    mediocre

For example

For instance

Eventually

In conclusion

·         Avoid conjunctions in academic essays

“I’m”, “I’ve”

·         Concise

·         Efficient

·         Avoid definitions

• Think of a title for your essay